Book Review: The Fear Saga #reading #bookreview #scifi

Author: Stephen Moss

Series: Fear the Sky, Fear the Future, Fear the Survivors


Through the vast expanse of outer space, a malevolent alien species has been watching us, coveting our world, and planning full scale invasion.  Their goal is twofold: completely eradicate the human race while preserving our planet in as pristine and undamaged a form as possible.  Because of this, their attack must first lead with a clandestine incursion; a small group of specialized agents must infiltrate our society at all levels, positioning themselves such that they can nullify our nuclear weapons capability and, therefore, our ability to destroy our own planet in a futile attempt to resist the coming armada.

Unknown to the aliens, however, is the fact that we know they’re coming, thanks to series protagonist Neil Danielson, who first notices the uncharacteristic behavior of an approaching meteor and begins to investigate.

The series starts out as a game of cat and mouse between a painfully small pocket of human resistance and the first wave of the invasion: seven incredibly advanced robotic agents supported by four all-seeing, all-knowing alien satellites positioned around the globe, all powered by an Artificial Intelligence capable of dredging every inch of our terrestrial and satellite-based communication networks for all data ever transmitted over the Internet.  It then evolves into a frantic race: the alien armada will be here in a decade.  We have that time to advance our technology to a degree that we have even a tiny hope of standing against them.


I’ve been thinking about doing this one for a long time, now.  If I recall correctly, this was the first series that I stumbled across where I downloaded it strictly based on the narrator (R. C. Bray).  I saw a bunch of really positive reviews, the author seemed to be a hard sci-fi fan (like yours truly), so I figured I’d give it a go.

Story 4/5

Overall, I really loved this series, despite some problems that I’ll get into below.  It was all kinds of imaginative and I really respect the amount of work that Moss took upon himself in putting this story together.  I need to stress up front that, though there are a large collection of characters in these stories, these aren’t really character driven stories by any stretch of the imagination.  There are a few functioning arcs here and there and Danielson, the main character, even has some brief flashes of honest humor in the first book, but my opinion is that you don’t read these looking for terribly deep human interaction.

The main point of these books, to my mind, was to set up this seemingly insurmountable threat to which we would have to respond.  The aliens coming to curb stomp us are advanced enough that we as humans could rightly regard them as Space Wizards.  Luckily, not all of these aliens are on the same page; some of them aren’t excited about committing genocide against an entire species.  Because of this, we humans are given a bit of a leg up/cheat code by our extraterrestrial benefactors; a leg up that unlocks some pretty mind boggling avenues of scientific discovery.

This is the heart of the story and is also one of the reasons I enjoyed it so much, despite its flaws.  In essence, the premise is what we as a species need to do to get to a point where we’re capable of defending ourselves against almighty Space Gods.  At the start, we’re given access to some very key fundamental technologies that allow us to explode ahead by several decades (if not centuries) and a timeline of ten years to build up our capability.  The best estimate is that the invasion force will be here in ten years.  Now, what do you do with that?

This series is a love letter to technological innovation and happily satisfies the geek in me.

Writing 2.5/5

This is where the series runs into some problems.  My understanding is that this was Moss’s first series of books and I’m sorry to say that it shows in his writing.  Thankfully for me, Bray’s expert narration was able to save the clunky writing; it seems that he went to great pains to clean things up without actually modifying the narrative.  The way he emphasizes certain words over others, mutes the expression of those which would have been better edited out, and flexes his narrative muscles to keep the dialog flowing is a testament to his expertise.  Had I attempted the print version of this story, I can’t honestly tell whether I would have finished it or not.  I’ll provide a few examples:

The most minor (in my mind) issue in the writing has to do with grammar; these books are positively stacked from floor to ceiling with dangling prepositions (e.g. Where did they come from? versus From where did they come?)  When the book is told from a first person narrative, you expect to see this kind of thing; this is simply how people talk and it actually does sound natural.  The Fear Saga is told from a third person omniscient perspective, however, which means that you want to have your grammar game on point (if the narrator is omniscient, he/she should know how to structure a sentence as well).  My understanding is that there were several other issues in the print version as well having to do with commas and run-on sentences, however these are far less apparent in the audio form.  I will note that the first ebook in the series has been flagged on Amazon as having quality issues for both editing and broken links, so take that as you will.

Because I consumed these stories in audio format, an issue that truly did stand out for me was the author’s overuse of pet phrases.  Such things bug the hell out of me both as a reader and a writer; I’m always on the lookout to eradicate such things in my own books.

Stephen Moss absolutely loves the hell out of the word “proverbial”.  Good god, you guys, does he ever.  He loves it so much that he even uses it in inappropriate situations where words like “literal” or even “figurative” would suit far better.  Even worse, he seems to insist on using the incorrect “proverbiably” rather than “proverbially”, a reality that Bray suffers through dutifully as he reads the story.  The first time I listened to the series, I wondered in shock if it was just Bray mispronouncing the word.  When it happened over and over again, I realized the man was doing his job and reading the text faithfully as it was written.  On subsequent readings (yes, I have indeed listened to the series more than once, I actually enjoyed it that much), I inwardly cringe along with the narrator each time he hits one of these doozies.

Another example would be Moss’s love of the phrase or formula, “He did X, such was the Y of his Z.”  Just replace X, Y, and Z with appropriate adjectives and verbs as needed:

  1. “He would not falter, such was the strength of his resolve.”
  2. “She felt total adoration, such was the intensity of his regard.”
  3. “He rolled his eyes yet again, such was the repetition of the formula’s usage.”

You get the idea.

Apart from the above, it just seems to me that the stories would have benefited either from a few more rounds of editing or at least another set of eyes.  Certain phrases or passages of dialog stumble all over themselves and clearly stand out as a first draft attempt that just didn’t get cleaned up later on.  One specific phrase that stands out occurs either towards the end of the second book or at the beginning of the third book.  I don’t remember exactly who was speaking but the structure was so damned jarring that it was burned into my brain:

“…you will be being monitored…”

Holy crap, right?  That is exactly the kind of thing that you write on your first pass where you’re just trying to get the whole damned thing on paper.  At some point, though, you read back through what you’ve done and pick stuff like that out for correction.  You at least get a couple of friends to page through your work and let you know that you’re doing things like that.

This is the kind of thing where R. C. Bray’s skills really come in and save the day.  The first time I encountered the above phrase, I actually had to stop and replay it to confirm that I’d actually heard what I thought I heard.  Bray’s delivery on stuff like this is outstanding; he actually picked one of the forms of “be” to gloss over in the reading and focused on emphasizing the other slightly more than necessary, the overall effect being that you as the listener only really hear one of them.  At first I thought I was only attributing skill where none actually existed but, having listened to this series at least three times now, I have to believe that R. C. Bray is doing it on purpose.  It’s just too consistent to not be intentional.

Characterization 3/5

One of the things that fans of the series criticize heavily is the arc of Neil Danielson, what he does by the end of the series, and what happens to him as a result; a series of events that I won’t spoil here.  Unfortunately, those fans are wrong.

Moss was doing a very specific thing with this character and, whether readers want to agree with the outcome or not, it was well done, for the most part.  Danielson has an actual arc, each point along the way is properly setup, and the payoff at the end is well earned.  Whether you as the reader are happy with the outcome is a different story; Moss is exploring a what-if scenario, not engaging in wish fulfillment.  I salute him for having the balls to do what he did instead of trying to make everyone happy, which must inevitably fail despite the best of intentions.

On the other hand, many of the characters in this story end up being interchangeable, with the exception of a few notable extremes.  Certain characters truly stand out with defined personalities, however this is due to the fact that their personalities develop to a point a little north of over the top.  I’m looking at you, Ayala.  Many characters feel as though they lack nuance in presentation, both in their actions and their speech patterns.  A perfect example are the two agents John and Quavoce who, apart from the fact that they do different things in the books, refer to different backstories, and are given different accents by the narrator, have very little to make them unique from each other.  Their speech patterns are essentially the same as well as their mannerisms.  Without the assistance of the writer/narrator to tell you who is who (by use of names or backstory tidbits), these agents are essentially interchangeable.

Real people have ways of speaking that are unique to them.  They have phrases and placeholders that they tend to rely on that are unique.  In these books, all of the characters use the same phrases, structure their sentences in similar fashion, and so on.  It’s a shame, too, because that lack of characterization tends to flatten out the character arcs presented to the reader and creates a feeling of interchangeability that hinders your ability to connect emotionally with the characters.

I think I’ll cut it off there.  I could go on but what this really comes down to is that Stephen Moss is a talented science fiction writer with a hell of an imagination but with little literary polish.  My recommendation to him would be to keep at it because his stories are still engaging despite their flaws and he’s certainly built up a hell of a fan base, yet if he continues to add to his writer’s toolbox and focuses on perfecting the craft of his writing, my humble opinion is that his stories would improve be leaps and bounds.

Science 4/5

And, because this is a Science Fiction story and Moss cites hard sci-fi as an influence, I’m going to take a minute to critique this aspect of the Fear Saga.

Over all, the science in these stories is really good.  It’s all grounded in just enough reality that it feels plausible while still jumping far enough ahead into the futuristic that the reader absolutely will experience a sense of wonder as the scientists in these books learn to crawl, walk, run, and finally fly.  It is apparent in the reading of these works that Moss put a lot of time into researching the various scientific fields that he explores and even adapted a lot of his findings into some very creative (and fun) areas.

I will take issue, however, with two basic points of physics.

First, the aliens approach interplanetary speeds just shy of the speed of light through the use of gravity wells.  More specifically, then have the ability to transport their space craft into what I’ll call no-space, or at least a sub-dimension, wherein their mass doesn’t interact with objects in our primary dimension and yet is still effected by the gravity of said objects.  In other words, they go to a dimension where their ship can pass through a planet, however the gravity of that planet still attracts their ship in this sub-dimension, so they fall towards the planet’s center.

Okay, cool, except for the fact that they continue to accelerate after they pass the planet’s center.  The idea is that they ramp their speed up to near-light by chaining a series of these bodies together; planets, stars, etc.  This has a cumulative effect, you see, and they just keep getting faster as they pass through each body.

The problem is that gravity pulls towards the center.  If they went to a sub-dimension where they were pulled into the center of a planet’s gravity well, they would instantly begin to slow down as they passed that center point.  Eventually, forward momentum would be completely exhausted and they would reverse direction back towards the center.  Think of a pendulum that loses momentum on each swing until, being overcome by the pull of gravity, it hangs motionless.

So that doesn’t work.

The other issue I had was with the descent of the space station elevator cable.  I haven’t done the math on this, so I don’t actually know if I’m one hundred percent correct but my gut tells me I am.  They have a space station in orbit around the planet which they want to tether to the ground through the use of an incredibly long cable.  The cable is made of alien wizard technology, so we can assume it is strong enough to handle the load.  The cable is so long (over 20,000 miles) and its weight so prodigious that it cannot be lifted up to meet the station.  It must instead by lowered from the station down to the earth.

Now, I’m not gonna lie, this is one of the cooler scenes in the books and I enjoyed the hell out of it.  Even so, a little voice in the back of my brain kept insisting that the cable’s mass would eventually pull the space station down to earth as soon as it had enough chance to be effected by the planet’s gravity.  Essentially, the more it was lowered, the heavier it would have gotten, until the combined weight of the meter thick, 20,000 mile cable yanked the counterweight station out of the sky.  I suppose you could counteract this pulling action by having the counterweight extend out from the Earth as the bottom portion of the cable was lowered, using the cable’s own inertia to counteract the pull of gravity.  You certainly couldn’t do it with a stationary counterweight and some reverse-thrusters; we simply don’t have anything that hauls that kind of ass, even in these stories.  And if I recall correctly, reverse-thrusters are the solution in this story.  It’s a minor point, really, but the rest of the science elements of the book were so damned fun and also so well done that little items like this really stand out by contrast.

Narration 5/5

As noted previously, R. C. Bray’s expert narration does a lot to cover over many of the literary and grammatical shortcomings in the series.  He uses just about every trick and technique at his disposal (developed over a considerably successful career) to put the best face that he can on Moss’s work, and the reader’s ability to enjoy the story is greatly enhanced for his efforts.

My advice to any prospective readers would be to go get the audible version, especially if you find textual errors to be visually distracting.


If you are a science fiction fan, I really hope that this review doesn’t put you off checking out this series.  I heartily recommend it to anyone who enjoys good, hard science fiction as well as alien invasion stories that are smartly conceived (as opposed to the usual Roland Emmerich dreck).  For all of the flaws I’ve listed above, I’d happily shelf this series right alongside some of the other greats like The Andromeda Strain and Footfall (both of which had plenty of their own issues, by the way).

Stephen Moss has spoken of a probable fourth book in the series, Fear’s Orphans, and I for one hope he goes after it.  Additionally, I look forward to seeing what he chooses to explore in other universes.  The guy is definitely a diamond in the rough but his storytelling succeeds despite those rough edges.  With a little polish, I foresee some amazing work in his future.

Thank you and welcome, new readers! #grateful @amwriting

Fantastically, it seems there are still folks out there taking a gamble on my first book.  I say “fantastically” because that means that by this point, anyone still hitting the button to download it is a complete and total stranger.  The family and friends crowd was exhausted a long time ago.

This also means that I’m doubly grateful to those of you jumping on the bus.  It’s no secret that this is a series I’m working on; a series that is incomplete, by the way.  I get that there are plenty of people out there who may be interested in beginning a series of books but hold back from doing so until said series has been completed.  Seems George R. R. Martin has burned one too many fans in the world…

So not only are you guys taking a chance on a relatively unknown author in a veritable ocean of new talent, you’re also banking on the fact that I’ll have this series of books done in a timely manner.  I’m absolutely humbled that you’re diving in with me.

I’m well aware of the phenomenon of authors freezing up towards the end of their series, freaking out that they won’t be able to bring things to a satisfactory conclusion.  What I can promise you, my readers, is that I knew what the end of the Commune Series looked like from Day One when I wrote the opening line.  There’s a plan here, and I don’t mean some nebulous Lost plan wherein the smoke monster turns out to be the manifestations of some super mutant human and all the characters are actually just dead time travelers (good God).  Nope, I’m talking about a real ending that gets properly setup and paid off.  I can’t promise that you’ll love what happens to every single character but I can guarantee that the ending will be earned.

Book Two is just around the corner.  There are only a few chapters left to write (perhaps five or less) and then on to editing!

Take care.

Commune Book One Audio Book Release @audbks @audible_com #audiobooks #listeninggoals

Commune One Audio BookSome of you may have seen this previously but I thought I’d put up another update on the audio release of Commune Book One.  Due to R. C. Bray’s crazy production schedule, the release of my book as been moved back a little to the September/October time frame, which is totally cool with me.  I’m ridiculously lucky just to have signed Bray; I’m not going to quibble over a month.

Either way, it sounds like we could be seeing book one available on Audible around October.  I planning on having book two ready to go right around this time, so hey, maybe the audio on two is ready to drop early next year?  Stay tuned.

In the meantime, you can grab the print or ebook version (as well as preview the story) here.

Commune Book Two Progress #apocalypse #amwriting

Well, I crossed the 110K word mark today.  Judging how much there is left in the story to cover for this entry, I’m guessing the final count will be somewhere around 130 to 140K, which is alright with me.  The good news is that I think I can still have it finished by August, but that’s probably only the first draft.  It’ll need to go through a few edits and such.

I didn’t have much of a target length for this book so much as I knew what the plot needed to be and what I wanted to cover.  I’m not sure if I’m surprised or not at the scope of this story.  I knew there were going to be several more people in it, that I’d have to deal a bit more with group dynamics, and that there would need to be some world building due to the fact that we’re now over a half-year into the post apocalypse and the world needs to be getting harder to live in as resources get consumed.

The biggest challenge by far has been keeping myself limited to telling the story in first person from POV characters.  It’s hard because as the writer, I’m aware of everything that’s going on in this world that I’d like to be sharing with you, the reader, and yet I can’t because the perspectives of my characters can’t see much further than the little valley they’ve carved out for themselves.  It’s important that I keep it up at least until the end of this book, though.  The idea that perspective of the narrator shades the story is a big part of what I’m trying to convey in these stories; giving up 1st person would obliterate that intent.

Should you be interested, you can find the first book in the series at this link.  Get yourself up to speed; these stories aren’t slowing down any time soon.

Fun little dialogue exchange I enjoyed writing #conflictresolution #marines #amwriting #postapocalypse

ssgtSSgt Blake “Gibs” Gibson is probably one of my favorite characters I’ve ever written.  Well, “written” may be putting it strongly.  He’s basically just an amalgam of some good friends who picked up a rifle and served.

If you’re ever about to tell one of them, “thanks”, do make sure you’re not being a dick when you do it.

“Easy,” George said.  “Gibs is a Marine Veteran.  He tends to look out for people.  We know this about him.  We’ve all benefited from this attitude many times over, lest any of us forget.  It’s a little disingenuous to start complaining when the very attitude that makes him such an asset in our group gets directed at some strangers in need.”

“Yes, George, that’s all well and good but the fact remains,” Edgar interrupted.  He turned his attention back to me and said, “First off, thank you for your service-“

“Don’t…you…even…try to start in with that line,” I said.

“I beg your pardon?” he asked, genuinely confused.

“That ‘thank you for your service’ bullshit.  It’s what a Vet usually hears right before he’s told that he’s basically wrong and irrelevant.  If someone’s gonna tell me I’m full of shit, I want to hear it outright.  I don’t want to be buttered up with that line.  You know how many times I heard that line right before someone told me in the same breath that I was full of shit and didn’t know what the hell I was talking about?  I’ll give you a hint: it’s like a big, old, sloppy blowjob in your basic, garden variety porn.  It’s foreplay, Edgar, and you’ve just told me that you like it rough.”

Vacations and Book Research #amwriting #postapocalypse #books #fiction

I’ve been on vacation out on Catalina Island for the last week and a half, so I’ve been pretty quiet with the whole on-line thing.  I’ve read this is a big no-no in terms of social media connectivity – you basically have to keep quacking out into the great big empty if you want to keep people engaged.  There is such a thing as decompression, though, dammit.

It’s been good being disconnected.  It’s kind of like when I wrote my first book.  I wasn’t trying to sell anything or engage with anyone.  I was just trying to bang out a good story.  This little media disconnect has taken me back to that early kind of momentum.  This has been good for the second entry in the Commune series; the book currently stands at 91K words with a lot more stuff to cover before it’s done.  I’m still projecting a finish around August (I’d love to have it all done by the time the Audio book for Book One is released), but who the hell knows at this point?  The story has already taken enough unexpected turns that I’m giving up on predicting anything.  I can say with certainty that book two is available well before the end of this year.  As far as the audio for book two?  Eh.  R. C. Bray is a busy dude.  He’ll get to it when schedule permits, I’m sure.

In the meantime, I thought it would be fun to post links to some of the articles and information I dug up while doing research for these books.  There’s a broad array of stuff to cover and still quite a bit more to go.  Never thought I’d know as much as I do about burning poop…

In addition to the below links, I am indebted to a collection of friends who have served in the Military over the years and who have been gracious enough to consider and answer my questions regarding their lives and experiences.  These people include H. S. Brandt (USMC), James R. Clark (US Army), and Brett Nelson (USMC).  All of these folks will get a mention in the coming book; they have been instrumental in this whole process.

Marine/Military Life



Burnouts and Other Random Hooey #amwriting

Been quiet a couple of days.  Things have been hectic.

One of the things I’m gradually learning during this whole writing thing is that you have to spend as much (if not more) time running your mouth about the books you’re writing as you are just writing the damned books.

I’m an introvert.  I wrote my first book with the understanding that:

  1. I need to create something or I’m going to tear out what’s left of my hair.
  2. Writing a book is about the most solitary activity in which I could engage.

Joke’s on me!  I didn’t have the first clue what’s actually involved in marketing a book and getting people to pay attention to it when I wrote my first book.  I knew there was some sort of thing you’re supposed to do to tell people about it but that was really some nebulous, undetermined activity to be reserved for later after all of the publishing activity was completed.

Holy Jesus.  I feel like Jay Sherman…


If you’re a true introvert, you know where I’m coming from.  You see, they have these people called extroverts, who get a deep psychological charge from interacting with other people.  They go to social events and gatherings, hang out and mingle with everyone all night long, and feel invigorated and energized the next day; ready to just go out and beat the shit out of the week.

Guys like me need a weekend of recovery after going out to dinner and a movie.  We literally feel like we need our batteries recharged.

For me, this is typically focused towards face-to-face social interaction.  I should and do have a higher tolerance for internet activity.  This, too, has a limit, it seems.

This is all a long, roundabout way to say that blogging a lot is freaking draining, man.  I’d rather be busy writing my next book; not writing about writing my next book.

Oh well.  Writing the second entry in the Commune series is actually tearing along, so I guess I’d rather have this problem than the alternative: the dreaded Writer’s Block.


Needed to develop some relationships. Wrote a scene involving a pissing contest…involving actual piss. #amwriting


Image Credit: Universal Pictures

It’s okay to write about pee-pee if you’re also about the business of developing your characters and plot.  That’s my story, anyway…

Commune Book One is available right now on Amazon, Kobo, and Barnes & Noble (see the free preview).  Book Two (including the epic pissing match in question) will be available later this year.